teejay-number13's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Sister deletes Zelda save]

To stay true to anime cliches, their next step would be make-up sex.

[Pokemon PD - Beta Trailer]

Uhh... This pretty much advertises things that almost every pokemon game has. Catch Pokemon! Heal them at Pokemon Centers! Battle other trainers! Okay, so what does Phantom Destiny have that other pokemon games don't? It looks like your main attraction is that Lavender Town is back. Well... Who cares?! Is Lavender town the center of the plot? Is this the Silent Hill version of Pokemon?

The point is, this trailer said nothing to make me interested in playing this game. Maybe revealing a little more about the plot would have been better.

[When you're hungry.]

Ha! That was a good one. Personally, I don't like Snickers.

[Zelda Onox Dark Dragon p2]

I've been following the series for a while and I like it. Being specific to this part however, I don't like the way Regalo and Zelda the First had to come in and save them. Still looking forward to what happens next, especially with Vaati and Dark Link's son, whether you do it in comic form or animated.

[Pokemon Darkness Ep 4]

I would like to give you a higher score, but I have to be honest in these reviews and episode 3 was definitely better. I think Esty already lectured you about the heroine. How she just abandons her life to join the hero for no reason, although I noticed you tried to salvage that by saying she just wanted to go explore the world. Still though, she could have done that on her own so we still have no reason as to why she chose to go with Andrew.
Speaking of the hero, he's awfully passive for someone who was raised in isolation and knows little about the world. He should be asking tons of questions about everything. Also, try not to rely too much on lines that tell us nothing. Like when the guy says "That's interesting" but the heroes don't ask why. Or when they ask him what he's doing but he says "that's my business". Why are they even trusting this guy who just jumps out of a tree and says hes here to help but keeps secrets? Especially when they know Team Darkness is gunning for them.
Overall, nothing interesting really happens in this episode and it suddenly ends just when it was getting good. When I write an episode, I try to give each one a self contained sub plot so even if the main story isn't advanced much, the audience can still get some kind of resolution.
-So in closing, if Anna is going to be in this for the long run, then she needs way more developing.
-Try to keep Andrew's actions based around his origins for now (ie: He knows nothing about the world but seems to have almost no curiosity).
-Using empty lines like "It's my business" or "That's interesting" without explaining is a terrible way to build suspense.
-And try to have each episode accomplish or resolve SOMETHING whether it's a sub plot or main plot.
Again, sorry about the low score but this episode is pretty forgettable.

dumbird responds:

I don't mind. The points you mentioned will give me a lot to think about. I still have a lot to learn in storymaking. Thanks for the advice.

[Pokemon: Fated Duel]

I really liked this... Three of four years ago. Now that I've gotten into flash, I can see that it actually kinda sucks. Okay it really sucks. I think the "fast-paced action" (which is really just shaky cam and constant tweening) actually just distracts people from how bad the animation is. If it slowed down long enough for us to focus on the actual look and movement of the characters, it would be pretty disappointing. Kudos for not using sprites (boo for the DBZ ripoff characters though) but on the basic level, It's no different from all those Sonic sprite battles with lots of forgettable action and no story!

Sorry, but putting a story in the description doesn't count. And your story just boils down to, can awesome guy and his powerful pokemon beat awesome villain and their powerful pokemon? That's not a story, that's an excuse for not writing a story. So in closing, cut the fights short so you don't wear yourself down, that way you can focus more on smoother movements and transitions. Limit the shaky cam and constant movement of the characters so it doesn't look like a clusterfuck. And maybe write a real story so I actually care about why these people are fighting and how it will turn out.

Tyrant-D responds:

teejay13 you Sir are a very cold-hearted individual!

I put blood, sweat and tears into creating this! and yes! I know it was critical failure! but for once in your life, don't take things so seriously. As for those sonic flashes, I consider them one of the worst things to ever hit newgrounds (Not all but MOST), as you compared this failure to them, I feel incredibly heart broken. These Pokemon battles was never about stories, I say FUCK FAIRY TALE STORIES! LET THE POKEBALLS AND EXPLOSIONS FLY LOL!

Your not even going to take account into the effort one put in making such a flash? your review favored in the trails of a "rant" more than all out "criticism"

Also WTF do you mean "Kudo's for not using sprites??" Get the Fuck out of here with that shit TJ LOL! at least I have the ability to draw unlike the one trying to lecture me in how I should rectify my animation style.

Now Teejay! let me find a window and jump out of it, as you have now shattered my soul. Just to make you feel better now, I think your *cough* "sprite based" *cough*"Pokemon: World of Chaos" series is incredible!

I'm very very very disappointed in you Teejay, very disappointed :( *sniff* *sniff* (Tyrant-D unhooks window) Whooooosh!! Splat**

[MLP - EW (Intro)]

Well I'm not too fond of people just doing intros but at least you're not just blatantly ripping someone off this time. At least I don't THINK you are. It will be interesting to see if you can come up with your own good story. As far as the intro, if you are using it a preview or a teaser, then you should try to have it give some insight into what we should look forward to. Right now, it's just some annoying Japanese song and a parade of characters, half of which no one knows or cares about yet. Plus no clues as to the plot, scale, or stakes of the show. This might leave people saying "maybe he'll make it, maybe he won't. Who cares." Also, when you trace bitmap sprites, you need to set it to pixels or it'll look really ugly, especially on your close up shots.

[Mermaid of Lunan Bay]

I love a happy ending... What? The prince died? I know, that's what I'm talking about! Pretty good artwork overall, could have had a little more motion.

[Cross X Universe]

Your code is fail central. It jumps back to beginning when you hit scene select or get to the part with army surrounding Hulk.

[Sonic TAS Ep1]

"One of the first animated Nintendo Movies on Newgrounds with talking characters!" - Author Comments

That is one of the most baffling things I have ever heard in an author comments. Nothing could be further from the truth. This leads me to believe that you have never visited Newgrounds before, or you are stupid, or mentally retarded. Luckily, I have no qualms about criticizing the work of any of those types.

Firstly, Sonic and Knuckles aren't Nintendo, they're Sega. The audio quality makes my ears bleed. Goanimate! is considered lazy by NG standards, so I would do the animation yourself. And you need to have lip synching with Sonic and Knuckles. I'm guessing that the vampire is supposed to be Nightmare (eNeMeE)? Well, if you did the artwork yourself, you could make him actually look like he's...

Oh wait, this is probably a troll flash. Never mind.