teejay-number13's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Power Rangers! Yellow]

Cool! Nice frame by frame and camera angles. Is that Trini or Aisha... Or how dare I ask?

[Goombario's Story]

Awesome! Nice to see this come to fruition and to pass judgement so quickly while other flashes take days now. Even though I wrote most of the jokes and have seen this a hundred times, it still makes me laugh.

I am very proud of this piece, I consider it one of my best attempts at writing comedy. I did lower my score half a star because of that one joke you changed despite my protest. I still think the other way would have been better. It was also annoying how you sometimes changed the dialogue without consulting your writer first and half the time we ended up changing it back. Other then that it was a pleasure working on this project. Your sprite work and attention to detail in animating always impresses me.

I'm looking forward to working on many more projects with you and the Superlab.

Eastbeast responds:

Thanks dude! It was great working with you as well. I felt this version of the script vastly surpasses the original one. We got to collaborate with a lot of talented people on this.

Yeah there were a lot of factors that contributed to me using the referred joke. Mainly because it had more of a punch and the previously written joke might have been almost too subtle. I agreed with you on most parts except that I think. Also, since it was close to the end I felt something with a bit more impact was more important. Although in the end I believe we came out with a production we can be proud and has a variation of humor.

Same here, I look forward to more projects on the horizon!

[Pokemon Darkness Ep 2]

Yeah this is much better. The animation was pretty good and you didn't "cut corners" like last time. The story is getting better. I want to know more about this new criminal team and it will be interesting to follow a person who knows nothing at all about pokemon and suddenly becomes a trainer. My only suggestion is to cut back on the number of "I can't tell you now but you'll find out later" lines.

[Sith Warrior]

Newgrounds is not the place for machinima. It is for animations.

[Dawn of True Power Ep.1]

Don't post this kind of stuff on the portal. How is this a test of whether you're a good animator, when there is NO animation? It proves nothing other then you know how to place a few Movieclips on the screen and use pre-made loaders. And Krazzygamer3y2 is an idiot who creates subpar knockoffs of other people's work and then claims he's doing it to honor them. Don't follow in his footsteps.

terencebird1 responds:

You criticized him!I warn ya,if you try to criticize him again,I'll show who's boss!

[Hulk Vs Wolverine]

This would have been funnier if you hadn't forgotten to take Wolverines unbreakable adamantium skeleton into consideration.

[TOME Episode 07]

I'm not going to criticize your artwork because personally, I think it's fine. Better then I can do for sure. It's your story and characters that really need work.

The story is boring, plain and simple. It's episode 7 and we still have no idea what the central conflict of the series is. All we know is that Alpha occasionally goes out of control (more on that in a minute) and the heroes want to know why. Otherwise, it has no effect on the world around them at all. Oh and there's this evil organization that just keeps sending villain of the week because they want to harness Alpha's power (I guess), for some unknown reason. Do they want to rule the world or just TOME? I know that all will be revealed eventually, but it still isn't enough to catch my interest until then. In other words, I would be indifferent if you decided to drop the series.

One of the biggest mind-bogglers about this series is TOME itself. It is a computer game that people are playing by sitting at a computer right? Yet when I watch, I feel like these are people living in the game and not just playable characters in an MMORPG being controlled by a human. Is it illegal in TOME to talk about the real world? And then there's Alpha going insane. How does a computer controlled character just go insane? Did the human controlling Alpha go insane too? The series doesn't imply that he simply lost control of the character, but that he lost control of himself. So what was the human playing Alpha insanely mashing buttons on a gamepad? Why didn't the rage make him drop the gamepad and start trashing his house? I know you're a fan of anime cliches, but that one just doesn't work here. I'm sorry. And what about Flamegirls hair? I like the new do, but how did that happen? She's just a computer graphic. Did the Dbug virus corrupt her graphic file or something? This makes no sense! And I get that Alpha risked coming back on to see his friends, but if his character is corrupted by a virus, why not just delete it and make a new one? I'm sure the administrators would allow that in the case of a corrupted file.

The show seems to switch between treating TOME like the real world or like a video game. It's not consistent and it's frustrating. When a hacker monster that seems unbeatable shows up, why don't the heroes just log off and come back on later? It would make sense if it were real and they couldn't do that, but it's supposed to be a game.

In conclusion, get a central conflict, set the stakes, give the players a reason to come back to TOME instead of using some other social network or game, and make sure the characters and plot treat TOME likes it's actually a MMORPG and not the real world.

Also I took away some points for the Hellbenders cameo. I know you said you added them as thanks, but I can't help but think you really did it to pander to Hellbenders fans (the creme de la crem right there). You're better then that.